Protected: Dark Chocolate Raisins

  • James

    That was a hell of a twist at the end. Definite shades of The Lottery there.

    I like the simple language, kept everything grounded and focused. And focused you on what you thought you were being led to read, but it turned out it wasn’t. I wonder if chopping it up a bit would work better, though? Since you easily slip tenses, it’d make sense.

  • i read the title of this as Dark Chocolate Remains at first. which turned out to be rather ironic. more later.

  • I think I accidentally spammed my beta reader email, would you please send again?

  • The twist was well done. You got a lot into 176 words. Liked it. (Though I might not eat dark chocolate raisins for a while.)